Can anyone help me make a GOOD ending conclusion to my essay about dentists? 10 points to best answer!?

this is what i have so far.. can you help me think of an ending sentence?





Choosing to be a dentist is a smart decision because it will be beneficial to them and their family in the future. The pay is great for a starting pay and they will be respected because of their title. This job is also very fulfilling because it is a way of giving back to the community. Dentists are looked up to as trustworthy and respected people in society.








when i read my conclusion it doesnt seem to flow nicely.. can someone help me make it better? and does the first sentence in my conclusion sound a little off? help!

Can anyone help me make a GOOD ending conclusion to my essay about dentists? 10 points to best answer!?
You may want to change your beginning to :


There are many reasons why one may choose to be a dentist. If one were a dentist, there are many benefits at hand for his family and himself.





Your second sentence can be improved to:


Besides a comfortable starting salary, dentists are also respected for their title.





Your second last sentence can also be edited to:


It is a fulfilling job in many ways, one of which is it's ability to give back to the community.





Your ending statement:





After all, a dentist is but another medical doctor; one who specializes in oral care.





So, ultimately your ending paragraph should sound like this:





There are many reasons why one may choose to be a dentist. If one were a dentist, there are many benefits at hand for his family and himself. Besides a comfortable starting salary, dentists are also respected for their title. It is a fulfilling job in many ways, one of which is it's ability to give back to the community. After all, a dentist is but another medical doctor; one who specializes in oral care.








...and ultimately, I'm the one doing your homework. lol.
Reply:First off, you're lazy for having us do you're school work. Anyways, you need to show some facts here, throw in a few quotes from the government. Second, it needs to be more open ended. Here's my only example: "Choosing to be a dentist can be a smart decision because it could be beneficial to their family and themselves in the future."





By the way, dentistry has the highest suicide rate in the workforce.
Reply:My brother-in-law is a dentist and he would be amused at your essay. For him, dentistry isn't an occupation. Although he makes a terrific income, he didn't enter the field for that particular reason. Nor does he feel he's "giving back to the community." He views his position as a "vital necessity for the community and a valuable service." Becoming a dentist was a long and arduous task, yet his dedication to his schooling is now reflected in the service he performs. Additionally, he stays abreast of his field by attending seminars and sharing information with colleagues and familiarizing himself with the latest techniques. In short, choosing such a profession is a life encompassing endeavor. It has its rewards, but school is never really "out" for those pursuing excellence in care and treatment.